ella jade

the story was real good. I love the character. her boots with short shorts might be a little strange but who isn't these days. please write more it's great. ~ ...

Thanks for the advice and I hope I fixed it to where it made better since. I'll write more soon. Thanks. ~ A book is like a garden carried in ...

hi! I think this story has great potential. I'd love to hear more. one question though um... what's a mage??

I think its a very good poem and don't have any suggestions on how to make it better. It's good as it is. nice work! :elephant:

I agree with the others. I think you if use a little better vocabulary and not so much spacing this poem would be hit. :D

I agree with blonde&confused. I always thought poems that always follow patterns and rhyme in every sentence were to plain. keep it up.

I think your poem was pretty good. There were some mistakes and I don't think the line Scare you till you run away scream out of the dark. sounds right. ...